Script - First Draft

This is the script that Aidan wrote

Script

Fade in from black to MCU shot of kitchen cupboards, dirty & untidy. Titles along cupboards or underneath.

Cut to shot of kitchen sink & surrounding counter, untidy, covered in crumbs, dirty dishes around the sink, etc., titles along wall/edge of sink.

Cut to shot of table, letters piled up, addressed to both Brian Hawk’s real name and superhero name, some say Private or Final Notice clearly bank statements, newspaper on table has headline relating to Brian Hawk fighting crime, could have credits on it, messily folded & thrown on table but clearly visible & legible, dramatic drumbeat in groups can be heard faintly in background.

Cut to shot of desk, drum beats still muffled but louder, laptop on desk, looks cheap & old, off but opened & at an angle, messy wires, papers messily put on rest of desk, show low bank balance, debt, late loan repayments, etc., credits on letters and/or post it notes around desk & laptop.

Cut shot of bottom of bed, pause then feet come in from above accompanied by loud drumbeats, slow tilt up to reveal Brian standing up from bed, tired looking (wearing untidy pyjamas/dressing gown/boxers), loud drumbeats, Brian reaches down lazily to table & picks up phone.

Cut to close up of the phone on drum beats, shallow focus, shows alarm on phone, alarm description could be credits, Brian presses snooze, drumbeats stop.

Cut to MS/MLS of Brian, bed in background to side, sheets messily thrown off, dirty clothes on floor in corner, clean on chair in messy pile, tosses phone onto bed & walks towards camera & out of shot, grabbing clothes from chair on way, credits along edge of bed or wall.

Cut to shot of bathroom mirror, dirty & stained, credits along bottom which dissolve out, Brian walks into frame right so that face can be seen in the mirror, tired & dishevelled, wearing shirt unbuttoned, still not dressed, splashes water on face, leans forward out of shot (discreet jump cut), comes back up brushing teeth, leans forward out of shot to spit (discreet jump cut), comes back up shaving with disposable razor, drops razor on floor, leans forward out of shot to pick up (discreet jump cut), comes back up washing shaving foam off face & applying aftershave, walks out of frame right.

Cut to shot of kitchen, Brian walks in from frame right to left & lazily opens cupboard, cut to close up of cupboard, Brian’s arms move into shot, opens cupboard, messily stacked bowls & plates inside, takes out bowl, closes cupboard & arms move out of shot (discreet jump cut to cover changing contents of cupboard), arms move back into shot & open cupboard, now contains food & cereal, messily arranged, takes out box of cereal, closes cupboard, arms retreat (discreet jump cut), arms return & open cupboard, contains milk & disoriented cat if available, removes milk & places down out of shot, then removes cat, closes cupboard. (Alternatively, this sequence could be done in a slow crabbing shot and/or without cat, or cat could push open final cupboard if willing, credits could appear inside cupboards)

Cut to MS/MLS of Brian sitting at table eating cereal, shirt half buttoned up wrong, milk bottle on one side & cereal box on other & opened, credits on/along cereal box and milk, hear ringtone of phone, takes phone out of pocket & answers, hear person on other end saying hero is needed & describes crime/situation, slow zoom in on hero to close up, hero's face slowly becomes more determined, other person hangs up, Brian starts to lower phone, then suddenly jumps as drumbeats alarm tone returns.

Cut on start of drumbeat to close up of superhero costume on back of chair, Brian snatches up on last drumbeat & cut to black. Cut on start of drumbeat to extreme close up of costume trousers being pulled on, Brian zips up fly/does up button on last drumbeat & cut to black. Cut on start of drumbeat to extreme close up of Lycra superhero t-shirt being pulled on, Brian lets go of shirt & it snaps tight on last drumbeat & cuts to black. Cut on start of drumbeat to extreme close up of Lycra superhero glove being pulled on, Brian lets go of glove & it snaps tight on last drumbeat & cuts to black. Cut on start of drumbeat to extreme close up of Brian’s face, determined, pulls on mask on last drumbeat & cuts to black.

Cut on start of drumbeat to MLS/LS of front door, superhero Brian runs in from frame left, opens door & leaves, slams door on last drumbeat, opens door again, picks up cat from inside, puts out & closes door on last drumbeat & cuts to black.

Cut on start of drumbeat to LS of Brian landing at crime scene dropping into 3 point pose, slight ripple effect to show impact, on last drumbeat stands up & starts walking towards camera, camera zooms out/tracks backwards with Brian, on start of drum beat criminal can first be seen, from behind, looking at Brian, says “What are you, some kind of superhero? Get out of here!” Brian unfazed, on start of drumbeats criminal raises baseball bat & swings at Brian, Brian catches on last drumbeat & cuts to black, punches & screams heard, title fades in.

Notes

This may me more than 2 mins, so may have to be cut down

All titles are just suggestions and not necessary, but could be good places to put them

Feel free to cut out any parts you don’t like or add in what you want

Most individual shots are only intended to be 1-2 seconds; unless obviously longer, exceptions would be: table with letters and desk (viewers need longer to digest info) & any shot where credits may be hard to read in this time

Cats may be removed as you please

For context, drumbeats were intended to be in groups like in Terminator 2 theme, but with longer gaps between & without rest of song (drumbeats every other bar rather than every bar & different rhythm, would create in GarageBand, will have example tomorrow) Terminator 2 Theme